This blog brings attention to my reflections about my Research Paper that I am currently writing. Included below is my process of my writing and how it aided me over these pass weeks. The video Reflective Writing guided me on how to properly reflect on my writing. Who did you work with to compose your research paper? Was this a good approach? I worked by myself, but I did watch the film again with my friend Shalina to get her feed back on the movie. I do think that it was a good approach. What rhetorical mode and genre are you using? The rhetorical mode is part persuade and to inform my audience. The genre I am using is Textbook with a splash of Realistic Fiction. When did you write this project? Good approach? I wrote this project on April 14th. Yes I think it was a very good approach. Where did you write this project? Good approach? I wrote this project in my bedroom, laying across the bed listening to Jazz vibes on Spotify. Also with some herbal refreshment to help with get my creative juices flowing. Yes i was a good approach. Why did you choose to write about your chosen topic? Good choice? I chosen to write about this topic because I never in my life saw a jail that looks like a hotel in the inside. And I never saw people who committed raps,murders, robbery's etc, being treat so nicely. With them living in condition like in the outside world. Also I didn't know that the actual concept came from America's constitution. The rule of "No cruel and unusually punishment. And that is exactly how they treat inmates in American jail. So that goes against the rules the America set for itself and needs follow their own rules. And yes I think it was awesome choice, because nobody will have my topic. How did it feel to write this argument ("during, after, and since")? Do you have any "if only" moments that can help you revise the draft? During- I felt empowered to being to bring light to this alternative way of rehabilitation for people who get put in jail. It was kind of surreal to be writing about some fairy tale, of how inmate do their time living in hotels or on some vacation resort. Also thinking to myself like, i want to go to jail too you to relax, get ya mind right, focus of yourself with no bills to pay. It blew my mind that the guards didn't have guns to protect themselves. But I guess when your in a vacation resort you don't want to get kicked out. After- I felt like I did something good. Like I am giving people something to talk about, spark a different keep of thought in the minds of the masses. Since- I felt like i need to go back in my research paper and give it some more action. How will you revise your argument? I will revise my argument by making it more of an argument. Go back an put some of the things people would say to that don't believe in alternative rehabilitation and treating people like humans not like animals.
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Moore, Michael. Where to Invade Next. Performance by Michael Moore, WHERE TO INVADE NEXT - YouTube, 12 Feb. 2016. In the film by Michael Moore called Where to Invade Next - YouTube. Michael Moore takes a quest to help America out of turmoil. It fictitious portrays the U.S military and U.S government outsourcing Micheal Moore's help to Invade foreign soil. Because their should still be something to take from these countries, to bring back to the states. So off he goes to invade these countries in the quest for resources and ideas to take back to the U.S. When invading these countries he will be shocked and amazing to find out that some of ideas and law are inspired by the U.S. As for my resources from the DCCC library database : Nilsen, Arne Kvernvik. “Punish with Dignity.” New Scientist. 9/17/2016, Vol. 231 Issue 3091, p20-21. 2p. 1 Color Photograph. Subject Terms:2016. DCCC Library Search Engine Alexander, Michelle. “Our Failed Prison System Is Exactly the One We Chose.” Washington Post,18 Mar. 2016. DCCC Library Search Engine and from other editorial websites O'Neill, Marine. “Norway Has the Most Luxurious and Humane Prisons in the World.” Newscomau Australias 1 News Site, 16 Mar. 2015, 7:16 pm, www.news.com.au/. Gentleman, Amelia. “Inside Halden, the Most Humane Prison in the World.” The Guardian, Guardian News and Media, 18 May 2012, 16:48, www.theguardian.com/society/2012/may/18/halden-most-humane-prison-in-world. Sterbenz, Christina, and Pamela Engel. “Why Norway's Prison System Is so Successful.” BusinessInsider.com, 11 Dec. 2014. These resources will support the fact that alternative approach's to jail rehabilitation can be accomplished by treating inmates like human being with dignity and respect. What also housing the inmates in private dorms like cells, with there keys like at home. Understanding that inmates are already being punished by having their taking away. So that choose to rehabilitate with respect, dignity, kindness, love and honor. And with these ingredients a person can be rehabilitated and not return to jail again. Here is a link to Where to Invade Next, summary and here is a link to my blog post #9 summary-and-rhetorical-analysis-of-where-to-invade-next.html Topic: Comfortable Living Conditions for inmates while they do their time in jail. Research Question: Should or Should not America's prison system jail make living conditions more comfortable and private for inmates? Argument: Should or Should America prison system make living conditions more comfortable and private for inmates? Well I think they should make living conditions more comfortable and private. Because even though they have committed a crime they should live in conditions that their use to. They should be treated like human beings, not like animals by putting them cages. They should have good food to eat and creative ways to spend their time in jail. Because it would therapeutic for their mind and soul to prepare them to be implemented back into society. It was mind blowing to see in the film W.T.I.N that, inmates were living in should lavish conditions. There living conditions were as if they were still living in outside world. They had things like an Xbox game console, Flat screen TV's, private bathrooms and the kicker was that they had their own keys to there cells or in this case their apartments. It was as if they were living independently and had total control of their environment. Also let not forget that the biggest comfort for the inmates is that the guards don't carry weapons, instead they will talk to you like a civilized person. And the guards are not beating up inmates viciously. Well the reason's why the America jail system wouldn't make living condition comfortable and private. Is because their in the business of making money. The prison system is big business in America. A lot of money made from jails in the U.S, which is one of the biggest money makers. They brutalize and torture people in jail. They do this by breaking you down mentally, physically and financially. So that you can be so broken down that you will only feel comfortable in those conditions, making you a repeated offender to make more money of your back. With all that cheap labor and hours put in that are making millions. Also in America your suppose to be getting punished for your crimes and have all human privileges stripped away. So you can remember not do a crime again, but what it does is brainwash people to come back. And the guards will for sure have guns to protect themselves, because your perceived to be an animal and inhuman. Which doesn't help with reform, but helps with your return customers making the jail system more richer. Also they will never give inmate there on keys to their cells because it would cause chaos and mayhem. And they wouldn't being able to control the inmate like animals, because when you keep something or someone in a cage they must be dangerous. Topic: Should Americans study their "true" past history and upbringings about how America was started and build? Research: Question: Should Americas study in school their true racist / slavery roots, Like Germany did in the film "W.T.I.N" about their Nazi and extermination of one demographics and in order for the them not continue repeat the past history and to bring the country as one? Argument: Should or Should not Americans study in school their true racist and savage roots, like Germany did in the film "W.T.I.N about their Nazi and the extermination of one demographics. In order for them to not continue to repeat the past history and to bring the country as one? Well first I think American wouldn't teach or admit to their racist and savage roots. Because it would be cutting into people's money and their family generation money. The people in power and people with a lot of money probably have family ties leading back to Americas racist and savage ways. Company of sorts would loss millions or even billions of dollars if people found out about their dark past history and money made of a slaves free labor. The reason why I think America should teach and admit to their racist and savage roots. Because it will give the mass public a better understand why African Americans are mad, sad and anger about their treatment of their people of the course of time. Also what their people had to experience by being transported to this country and being implemented into society. Also it would solve a lot of the issues that plague communities, workforce and the human interactions in daily life. Also can American could be more productive and positive. Because when people are happy they like to work. Topic: Labor Laws Research Question: Should employers and corporations in the U.S.A implement the labor laws an seen in the movie "What to Invade Next", where employee's get paid in full for parental/maternal leave up to or exceed 5 months and also received employee a 13th salary at the end of the year? Argument: Should or Should not employers and corporations in the U.SA implement the labor laws as seen in the film " What to Invade Next", where employee's get paid in full for parental/maternal leave up to or exceeding 5 months and also employee's receive a 13th salary at the end of the year? Well first I think employers and corporations should implement the labor laws and seen in film "What to Invade Next, when Michael Moore invaded Italy. Because it would make people happy to come to work and more productive. Like for instance getting that 13th salary at the end year. That would cover all the money people had spent over the holiday's and allow employee's to have money in your pocket for the new year. Also the 13th salary can paid for vacation, bills, clothes, eating out etc. It would also be good if U.S employers and corporations implemented the labor laws as seen in the film "What to Invade Next. Because i think mother should be able to stay home and recover. Paying mother up to or exceeding 5 months helps the mother to save for daycare and to get to know her child and bond with them. Because usually women are single mothers or don't have the money to pay for daycare after birth so, this 13th salary would help out tremendously. The reason's why I think employer's and corporations would not implement the labor laws as seen in film "What To Invade Next". It's because they would look at the money that has to cover these new rules would take money after from their money. Let for example, the 13th salary labor law. That would never happen because employer's and corporations giving out another salary without any work attached to, would be absurd. Employer's and Corporations would also never allow and paid for maternal/ parental up to or exceeding 5 months. Is because they want to work the women until she almost 7 - 8 months pregnant. They would want her back as soon as that baby comes out, so the women can make more money for them. Also some companies would probably say to the women who had the pregnancy, "No one told you to have another baby, we need to back to work or else". With no care that she just had the baby and she has probably been working for that company for 5 years or more. So any extra money that companies and employer's have to kick out, would be look upon as a loss for the business. And the businesses are in business to make money and not to loss money. This a link for you to look at my work on documentary Where to Invade Next This blog post is inspired by events in the documentary "Where to Invade Next" produced film director Micheal Moore. It is a documentary about how the American government approached about how to solve some of most talked about issues. Like Health Care Reform, College Education debt, Labor Law, Women Right, Decriminalizing Drugs, Our judicial system and abortions etc. So he took flight to foreign countries such as France, Germany, Italy, Norway, Finland, Portugal, Slovenia, Iceland and Tunisia South Africa. His plan is travel to international land and invade there soil and take some of their resources, ideas and polices to bring back to the states to solve our problems. And what he discovers will surprise and blow his mind. In the documentary "Where to Invade Next, Michael Moore plans to fictitiously invade foreign soil on request from the American government. They approached Michael Moore in desperation because they need more answer to solve some major issues, that American can't themselves out off. To help improve our social and economics problems. He touches on the chronic issues that Americans have been dealing with since the beginning of time. Issues such as Health Care, Decriminalizing Drugs,Education, Labor Rights, Women Right and much more. So while in international lands he carries the America flag and plants it at the spot where he has successfully invading in a humorous way. And at times in the movie his reactions to what he has been told, leaves him in total shock and disbelief. But come to find out that all of the inner workings and structure of their perfect systems, came from the United States model of the way they should carry out their polices. So in retrospect is America holding up their end of the bargain. But who is to say that these ideas and laws won't be a reality for us in the near future. Truthfully they have already start adopting some of the ideas by decriminalizing marijuana, so maybe this is a look into what is to come. How does Michael Moore establish ethos? Well his credibility comes from his previous films like Fahrenheit 9/11, Sicko and Bowling for Columbine. His way of bringing the truth through facts, legal officials and public opinion. He is also an American citizen living in the reality of this harsh land and has 2 views from a citizens side and from someone in a position to spread awareness. How does Michael Moore use logos? He uses logos by presenting the differences of what happens in the states, compared to what happens abroad. He would the differences by using videos and text. How does Michael Moore appeal to pathos? He appeals to audiences emotions by using music and visuals. Like the scene when he show's the inner workings of an American jail and how a inmate was being beaten by the guards. He paired that scene with some somber music. And the scenes where he was in the international community the music was upbeat and pleasant. Making you feel some sense of happiness and no worry. What is Michael Moore's telos? Micheal Moore purpose was to show how other countries handle their social and economics ills, in comparison to the U.S. And by these countries uses their methods, transformed their peoples total quality of life and self development. Also to inform that people live longer by enriching their lives. What is the kairos of this film? The setting of the film was to demonstrate that American is desperate for answers from anyone that can solve our social and economic problems. And that maybe travel abroad will have all the answers to our problems. If we try people with dignity, respect and love anything is possible. |
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